Winter and Spring
Winter and Spring are in battle
Winter orders a bone chilling wind
But spring fires back, pushing the clouds to bring the sun
Spring has won
Winter and Spring are in Battle
Spring sun glistening off the snow
But Winter runs to the shadows
Winter has won
Your poem was neat
ReplyDeleteThe description was weak
A little more rhyme
It would have been fine.
I loved how there were two perspectives in your poem it had a nice chime
ReplyDeleteOne way you could have improved is simply to make it rhyme
From your descriptions I could Visualize the time
It would have been even better if you would have had different first lines